Friday, September 28, 2012

Gone--Part 2

    Because someone (aka Hope) was telling me I needed to post the next part of Gone I have sat down and typed it out real quick.  Just to let you know, the people presented in this part are not the main characters in my story.  Also, this story is going to be allegorical.  So, if anything out of the ordinary happens in future parts (if I post more) that is why.

     “Eliza!  Grab me another Mountain Dew!” an overweight man lying sprawled out on a couch yelled, his hand poised to replace the words with a handful of chips.
    “You can get your own Mountain Dew!” a woman walked out of the rundown kitchen, a cigarette dangling limply between her fingers.  Unlike her husband her form was thin and at one time could have even been called graceful.  However, her face was now haggard and large dark circles swooped down below her eyes.  She plopped down on an overstuffed chair and sent a scornful look at her husband.  “You need to get off that couch and start running some laps.”
    He glared at her, the light from the TV flickering on his face, “Shut up woman.  I don’t need your advice.” 
    Cackling she leaned back and stared up at the dirty ceiling.  A few moments passed with only the noise from the TV sounding in their ears.  “Hey, did you hear something,” the woman straightened up slowly and glanced about her. 
    “No!  Quit gabbing!”
    She shrugged and glanced out the shabby blinds into the darkness beyond.  “Will you quite messing around?” the man sat up and pegged her with a glare.
    The blinds closed with a snap and she returned her gaze to the TV screen while reaching out for a handful of popcorn.
    A loud knock on the door reverberated through the house.  Throwing a kernel into her mouth she made her way through the clutter.  While running one hand through her hair, trying to put it in some sense of order, she twisted the doorknob and opened the door.  Empty space met her eyes.  “Hello?  Anybody out there?” she squinted out into the night.  “Huh.  I guess it was someone playing a jok-”  Her voice cut off as her mouth opened in a silent scream. 

5 comments:

  1. I should have mentioned that this part of the story will not seem to go along with the other part at all...

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  2. Angela-you have plenty of time, you just need to work on your priorities. ;)

    Though sadly, school, Bright Lights and what else you do, is probably of higher priority than appeasing our curiosity. :Z

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  3. Yes, this time I agree with Hope! Keep your priorities straight! Will these stories effect you for the good or bad for eternity!? Just a thought! :) Good story though...I can't wait to see how it will connect to the 1st part!...though I have a clue or two! :)

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